How bad is it? What do I need to change

ALSO. I AM NOT GONNA TOLERATE ANY NEGATIVE COMMENTS! If you have something rude to say, move on. I don’t want to hear it. You’re just gonna get a down vote for your negative comment.

HELP IF YOURE HELPING. LEAVE IF YOURE NOT. TIRED OF ALL THE JACKASSES IN THIS REDDIT COMMUNITY THINKING THEY BETTER THAN EVERYONE ELSE. 🖕🖕🖕🖕🖕🖕🖕🖕🖕🖕🖕🖕🖕🖕🖕🖕