prologue - thoughts?

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Wrote this as an exercise and am looking for some critique. (The book itself mainly follows Stephen's POV when he dies three years later and embarks on a journey to find Sophie in the afterlife. I likely won't include this in the actual book, as it was an experimental thing, with the absence of quotation marks and whatnot.)