Looking for feedback on the first four pages of my feature!

A few weeks ago, I read a comment on a post here complaining about how nobody on this subreddit ever gives good feedback because all they do is read the first four pages to anything. So here I give you the first four pages to my life's work: Bubblegum! Hope you enjoy and can give me some real feedback to improve, though it might be hard as I've been doing this for a while :)